Moment in time writing Jubilee.

Learning goal:I am learning to write moment in time writings.
Success Criteria:I can use this for my writing.

Draft 1

I saw fancy cups and magnificent painting on the wall

I heard people singing

I felt cheerful because  

I wondered if the school liked the tasty  banana cake.

Draft 2

I heard room 3 fantastic singing.

I saw the school showing respect as they walked into church.

I felt was the most scrumptious banana cake in the

I wondered how st Pius felt when he walked to school barefoot.

Draft 3

I heard magnificent singing  as we sung the songs.

I saw children from our school reading scripture passage.

I felt like I had the best banana cake in the whole world.

I wonder how we got  the name saint pius x for our school.

Draft 4

I heard father preaching about saint pius x.

I saw banana cakes that looked really delicious and scrumptious.

I felt like I was learning more about  saint pius x.

I wonder why our school choices the name saint pius x